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Jades, you were right.
First person present is hard.
Following the discussions about Part 2 of Master Plan, I went and wrote a nice little chunk from Jack's POV, which succeeded in getting his motivation straight in my head.
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jadesfire2808's comments about 'show, not tell' over on fandom_me's journal, and I finally understood what she was saying about first person present making it far too easy to go emo and expositiony. Which is what I'd done. I get it now, Jades :-).
So. I'm going to keep Jack's soliloquy as a character study, just for myself. And I think I'm going to try keeping the story from the Master's POV, and try and get Jack's motivation across in other ways. And hopefully use some of the lines from Jack's soliloquy here and there because, even if I do say it myself, there were some good lines!
It's interesting, though. I've done a fair bit first person past (in particular, that great long thing I'm writing) and hadn't realised how different first person present is. How hard it is to stop it just becoming the narrator's thoughts, almost like a diary. This is a fascinating journey I'm on here.
Thought on WIPs
When other people do them, especially if they're people like me who might take ages to post the next chapter, I hate them. Unless I really know and trust the author, I leave them unread, so I can go back and read them when they're finished – and then when they're finished there's just too much to trawl through so I never do get round to reading them.
And I never meant to be one of those people who posts chapters as they go along.
But I'm getting such incredibly useful feedback in comments, not just from my betas, that I'm going to keep posting like this. And I apologise in advance for when my inspiration dries up and I find myself unable to write anything for months on end.
Saying that, I am at least trying to make each chapter relatively self-contained and not too cliff-hangery…
First person present is hard.
Following the discussions about Part 2 of Master Plan, I went and wrote a nice little chunk from Jack's POV, which succeeded in getting his motivation straight in my head.
And then I read
jadesfire2808's comments about 'show, not tell' over on fandom_me's journal, and I finally understood what she was saying about first person present making it far too easy to go emo and expositiony. Which is what I'd done. I get it now, Jades :-).So. I'm going to keep Jack's soliloquy as a character study, just for myself. And I think I'm going to try keeping the story from the Master's POV, and try and get Jack's motivation across in other ways. And hopefully use some of the lines from Jack's soliloquy here and there because, even if I do say it myself, there were some good lines!
It's interesting, though. I've done a fair bit first person past (in particular, that great long thing I'm writing) and hadn't realised how different first person present is. How hard it is to stop it just becoming the narrator's thoughts, almost like a diary. This is a fascinating journey I'm on here.
Thought on WIPs
When other people do them, especially if they're people like me who might take ages to post the next chapter, I hate them. Unless I really know and trust the author, I leave them unread, so I can go back and read them when they're finished – and then when they're finished there's just too much to trawl through so I never do get round to reading them.
And I never meant to be one of those people who posts chapters as they go along.
But I'm getting such incredibly useful feedback in comments, not just from my betas, that I'm going to keep posting like this. And I apologise in advance for when my inspiration dries up and I find myself unable to write anything for months on end.
Saying that, I am at least trying to make each chapter relatively self-contained and not too cliff-hangery…
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Anyway, Part 3 is underway and it is Master's POV. And I'm feeling pretty good about it :-)